Reaching for the door of opportunity
to find freedom
and break free.
The air is stale,
It is suffocating.
The 6 walls around me
Leave me in an enclosed cube.
I’m trapped!
The feeling that a Giant
like Goliath
Stands 6 feet tall
before me is prominent.
My flesh, weak and frail
Held together by ligaments of fear
Gives in, crumbling under the pressure
Of this challenge.
A giant within and a mountain before me –
An enclosure that needs a big God
To expose me.
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This poem was talks about being trapped, not only physically in a house or something but being trapped by your thoughts and memories.It's when you keep remembering the things you want to forget that makes you feel trapped!
17 voices have spoken:
this is very good. i likey
some talent
i love the Bravura
I feel like this a lot of times!
This is great!
Keep the poems coming girl! U r talented!
U know say I luff u! lol
a big God is wat we all need...
@ Bibi- thanx a lot.
@ Robyn - thanx for the compliments!
@ TouchyMiMi - thank u girl! u knw say i luff u too..lol
@ Omo Oba - That's true indeed.
Straight and simple language.
Nice one there!
I think this template is fabulous, and if it is too much work to manage two different blogs I say you can update here more than on the other one.
I like this poem: do you know that sometimes we trap ourselves in a box of our own emotions, when nothing demands it? We create our own Goliaths and build up our own prisons...we create fables even before the real ones appear...
@ Daring- Thank you
@ Jaycee- yes indeed,we do trap ourselves in our box of emotions..that's when we let fear take over and put faith in the back seat!
...and thnx for the piece of advice, i think i'll do just that.
Thnx for stoppin by!
I love the template.
The poem's touching,but impossibilities are the easiest things for God to solve. Thanks for sharing.
"Christ has set us free ..." - would be good for you and me. But from His side "Christ has set us free in freedom."
@ lindah- thanx, and u're right.. impossiblities become possibilities with God!
@ David C Brown- couldn't say it better! thanx for stopping by mine.
awww...wow..not only is ur poem good it comes with commentary...I LOVE!!!!
I sincerely do...nice one here...
This is really creative. I feel this is me. Well, I actually feel this way sometimes. Sounds like the voice of someone trying to break free from the uneccessary wall they have created for themself.
I just had to read through all your poems. Loving the creativity here.
@ Chari - thanks, thanks..I appreciate it!
@ Today's ranting - yh dats the idea beind the poem.Thanx for the compliments, appreciate it!
I relate with this peom. But we can get out by becoming the giant in and out, it's hard but doable
This should be my first time here. I am really happy to find more and more real hardcore poetry blogs.
Good stuff. :) thanks for stopping at mine the other day...
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